Enchanted, a #fridayflash story

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Thank you for stopping in to read my #fridayflash! I’ve been away for a while because I’ve been writing several shorts – actually finishing them! (that’s quite a feat). I’m letting them rest now, before editing, while deciding what I’ll do with them – there are three options in my mind.

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Before we get to the story for this week, I’d like to thank Richard Bon of Liminal Fiction for being gracious enough to grant me the Versatile Blogger Award. Thank you Richard! I do apologize for taking so long to post acceptance, but please know that I appreciate the award very much. Thank you!

Enchanted is rated PG-17 according to my standards.

Enchanted, by Deanna Schrayer 

They called her Storm because she was one. Red-gold curls swirling about her shapely hips like a startled den of snakes, furiously bouncing against her bare, tan shoulders, the excitable dancer stormed across the stage to the beat of REO Speedwagon’s Riding the Storm Out. Her black knee-boot-clad feet stomping, stomping, stomping the faux-mirrored floor so hard you couldn’t help but watch, enthralled, amazed – my God, the energy! Where did she get it? Hampton didn’t know, he was only glad her attention was directed at him. Wasn’t it? Yes, yes, she was looking right at him, demanding his attention, as if such a beauty needed to demand at all.

Hampton was certain he had hidden himself well, that he was concealed by the eerie shadows in the small club, but suddenly Storm was tousling his thick, black curls, beckoning him closer, closer, ever closer. Ah, but not too close – don’t touch!

He thought for sure he’d gotten a one-dollar bill out of his pocket to show his appreciation for this woman’s potent talent, but when he tucked the money into her black, lace garter, he saw with alarm it was a twenty! Storm must’ve sensed that alarm, for she drew back then and spun on her heels, away from Hampton, surreptitiously tucking the twenty underneath the wad of ones that were held tight by a rubber band.

But she didn’t walk away from him. No, she didn’t walk away. And she would never walk away from him again. 

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How do you read? An essay on voice translation (and book reviews) at The Life of a Working Writer Mommy

Hey everyone! I hope you’re all doing well. I’ve been quite busy lately and so haven’t been writing #fridayflash stories, but I have been reading – too much! I hope you’ll stop in at The Life of a Working Writer Mommy to discuss the translation of voice when we’re reading, as well as read a few book reviews. Come on over!

I hope to be back in the swing of things and post a #fridayflash soon. I only need to get my nose out of the books and put pen to paper! :)

The Trip: Excerpt from a short story – #fridayflash #amwriting

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Thank you for stopping in to read my #fridayflash! The Trip is an excerpt from a short story I’m working on. I appreciate all constructive critique.

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The Trip is rated PG according to my standards.

The Trip, by Deanna Schrayer

Sarasota Mist Dugan meandered through the house and turned on every light, including the one above the stove, the one above the kitchen sink, the one above the bathroom mirror, and both the front and back porch, then rolled her suitcase and supplies bag to her Camry, loaded them into the trunk, slid behind the wheel, and cranked the engine. When she turned her head to back out of the driveway she saw the envelope sticking up out of her purse. Sighing, she put the car in park, took the letter inside, and tossed it on his recliner. Before heading back out she noticed the side table lamp was off and so she turned it on. She caught a glimpse of their wedding protrait beside the lamp. Sarasota trembled, ran back out to her car and drove away, fast.

This was not a planned trip, not exactly, but she’d felt the need for quite some time. Often she pondered on the details, easily seeing herself curled up on a wide sofa by a roaring fire in a cabin, or just as easily sprawled out on a silky blanket on the beach, the hot sun beating against her back as if to burn straight through and warm her soul. But that was as far as she’d get – pondering – before he walked into the room and smiled sweetly at her, scattering the dream like so many withering rose petals under an August sun. Until his cat, Juniper, jumped onto the window sill and knocked the blue vase her mother had given them on their first anniversary to the hard-wood floor, shattering it to bits. That had been the straw that sent her rushing to their bedroom where she pulled the suitcase from her closet and filled it with shorts, tee shirts, sweaters and jeans, lining the clothing with several smocks and her favorite paintbrush.

She called the bakery where she decorated elaborate wedding cakes and left a message for the manager, saying she’d be taking a leave of absence to help care for her dying uncle. Sara felt a smidgen of guilt for lying but she certainly couldn’t jeopordize her job by telling the truth. She didn’t plan to return, but Sara had never been one to burn bridges.

Now it was ten o’clock of a cold Wednesday morning and so Sara drove south, deeper and deeper into the blinding sunshine. She dazed through who knows how many miles before she realized there was no music. She turned the radio on and scanned through the talk shows until she reached E Street Radio where her all-time favorite song was just beginning….

The screen door slams

Mary’s dress waves

Like a vision she dances across the porch as the radio plays

She turned up the volume to drown out her voice. Sarasota stopped thinking. And she drove.

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A video of Bruce Springsteen’s Thunder Road was supposed to be here but for some reason WP won’t allow me to add a video at the moment, so….click here to listen to Sarasota’s (and my) favorite song.

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What’s the clue: Stop Now! or Keep on Going! ? #fridayflash #amwriting

She saw it coming

When I read the forecast Thursday night it told me there would be rain Friday morning and then it would clear up and be partly sunny for the afternoon, (albeit a lot chillier than the 70 degrees we just experienced the day before). Knowing this, I decided to get my work out of the way in the morning so I could sit outside and write in the afternoon. As I worked it was not raining, in fact the weather was what it was supposed to be in the afternoon – clear and mostly sunny, cool and just a bit windy. I thought “Woo-hoo! It’s gonna be nice like this all day!” and so I rushed to get my work finished and then went to a local park to write.

At the park I was happy to find my favorite picnic table available. I gathered my blanket, seat cushion and book bag and crossed the bridge over the fast-rushing creek to the picnic table. But once I got settled I couldn’t decide what I wanted to work on – whether to edit a short story, finish a different one or start a new one altogether. So I sat and thought a while, the slight breeze slinging my long hair in my face, (I finally got irritated enough to pull it back into a ponytail).

Eventually I decided to work on a new story and I flipped through my ideas notebook. Soon I discovered a great idea to go with the windy weather – a woman is home alone when the electricity is knocked out by a thunderstorm that rages around the house.

The sky was still clear blue and mostly sunny so I closed my eyes and imagined being the woman in the dark. After a few minutes I felt the rumble of thunder shaking the home’s windows, I saw the bright flashes of lightning burn the ground as the woman watched through her kitchen window, I felt her tremble.

Knowing this was the perfect time to transcribe I opened my eyes and set about scribbling all this down in my notebook. The wind had picked up considerably and after filling four pages I glanced up and saw that the sky had become dark with gray clouds, there was no blue in sight now. But it wasn’t raining so I kept on writing.

As I showed the woman’s fear when she sees a shadow in a dark corner of her kitchen I heard a raucous Crack! My immediate thought was “Wow, I’m really into this story,” which, as all writers know, is a terrific feeling. But then I glanced up from my notebook, saw the strong winds whipping the trees all around me and realized this storm was not in my imagination – it was real, and it was nearly right on top of me.

Aggravated that I had to stop writing when I had just gotten so into it, I stood up and began to gather my things. Then I heard it again – that loud Crack! I looked up just in time to see the entire top of an old oak tree come falling out of the sky.

And it was headed straight for me.

I jumped sideways, dropping my book bag at the same moment the tree hit the picnic table. Had I not realized when I did that the storm was indeed real and not in my imagination, I wouldn’t be writing this today. Yes, this is a true story, not a Friday Flash.

What were my first thoughts when I realized my life had just been spared? Not: “Thank God I’m alive!”, but: “Does this mean I should stop writing this story or does it mean it’s a great one and I desperately need to finish it?” But I didn’t have time to ponder the answer because here came the gully-washing rains. I headed for my car and sat for a while, unable to help myself from taking up my pen and finishing the thought I had been in the middle of when I was nearly killed.

What do you think? Was the falling tree an ominous sign that I should no longer write, or was it a motivational sign from God to Keep on Writing!?  

Have you had such an experience before? I’d love to hear about it!

P.S. This whole episode reminded me of the story I wrote last year, She Saw It Coming, which readers chose as one of my best #fridayflash works. The picture I used for this post is even the same one I used for that story.

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Hit the Trail – #fridayflash #amwriting

Thank you for stopping in to read my #fridayflash….. if that’s what we can call it; some may consider it more poem-like. I wrote Hit the Trail last fall after we hiked in the Great Smoky Mountains, (okay, the truth is I scribbled it as we left the mountains for home and the hubby was hitting every pothole in sight), then I tucked it away and forgot about it. I just have rediscovered it and wonder if it’s worth a diddle, or if I should’ve kept it hidden. I appreciate you taking a moment to offer me your honest opinion.  

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Hit the Trail is rated G according to my standards.

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Great Smoky Mountains – Image by Wikipedia

Hit the Trail, by Deanna Schrayer

Sky overcast, hazy, hurts your eyes to look at – strenuous! Humid day, clothing already wet when sweat drips, sliding down spine, cheeks – itchitchitch, dripping from forehead, pools up inside sunglasses, hips and legs screaming in pain as if climbing mountain is first action they’ve ever taken. Finally reach the last steep stretch and head tingles – halo of hornets circling in search of place to build home. Cicadas buzz all around in orchestra of heated song while faint hum of traffic drones in distance. Tinges of autumn appear in ground cover, mustard-colored, deepest recesses of oaks and maples dry as in months-long draught. Bright yellow salamanders – neon blue tails – skitter across roots sticking up out of ground almost crushed by heavy feet, they’re playing chicken. The climb! Rocks size of Colorado boulders jut up out of trail, on either side of trail intent on tripping you up or squeezing you in cold dark embrace.

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Over and Over – #fridayflash #amwriting

Thank you for stopping in to read my #fridayflash. Be sure to visit Mad Utopia  or the Friday Flash Community for more great flash fiction by outstanding authors!

I just realized that I haven’t posted any “true” romance in quite some time. So here’s one inspired by [what I believe] is a beautiful romantic song – Crimson and Clover, (video at end of story).

Over and Over is rated PG according to my standards.

Over and Over, by Deanna Schrayer

Cole slammed the door of his Camaro and leaned against the car. “Some star quarterback I am”, he thought, “couldn’t complete a pass tonight if my life depended on it.”  He unrolled his t-shirt sleeve, retrieved the pack of cigarettes and squinted his right eye shut as he lit one. The spark of the match illuminated the dark around him, revealing nothing. This is why he came here, under the bridge. It was full of life, yet free of life, giving him the space he needed to breathe.

He couldn’t get a moment’s peace at home, what with his dad pushing him to choose a college, and all the coaches coming by to visit. Maybe after tonight’s performance they’d leave him alone for a while. The music of the creek bubbling over the smooth stones relaxed him.

A twig snapped. 

Cole startled. “Who’s there?” He looked around but saw no one. 

The crunchy fall leaves rustled.

Still, Cole saw no one. He moved only his eyes as he scanned the brush for movement. Slowly a form began to take shape, as if the night itself was coming alive. “Hello?” he tried again.

A girl stepped from the shadows. “I heard your car.” The moonlight shone on her dark hair, which was the only feature outside of her comely silhouette he could see. 

 “Where did you come from?”

“I, um, I went for a walk after the game, and, um….it’s peaceful down here.” She stepped further out and Cole saw it was the new girl at school. She’d just joined the cheerleading team a week ago and he hadn’t had a chance to introduce himself. “I’m Penny,” She proffered her hand.

“Cole, Cole Motsinger.” He tossed his cigarette and took her hand. It was freezing.

“I know,” she laughed, tucking a curl behind her ear, “I’ve heard a lot about you.”

“Oh yea?” his voice was a bit higher than he preferred. He cleared his throat.

“Yea, I hear you’re a pretty good player.” She smiled and raised her eyebrows.     

“Ha!” he startled himself with his cackle, “You wouldn’t have thought that if you watched the game tonight.”

“I did watch it.”

“Oh yea.” God, I’m such an idiot, Cole thought.

“Well you didn’t have much of a chance to show how good you are, what with no one on the line blocking for you. You had no one to throw the ball to.”

A girl who knows football?  Cole took a step closer and saw she was wearing her cheerleading uniform, but no sweater. “Aren’t you cold? It’s barely forty degrees out here.”

“Yea, a little bit I guess.”

“Do you want to sit in the car?”

She looked at him with a more discerning eye then, sizing him up.

“Don’t worry, I won’t bite.” Cole smiled and Penny felt dizzy. He walked around to the passenger side, “Come on, get in.” He held the door open for her, then walked around the front of the car and slid in the driver’s seat. He rubbed his hands together, and started the engine. “It’ll just take a minute to warm up. Here.” He reached in the back seat and got his jacket, put it around her shoulders.

“Thanks.” She gathered the rough leather around herself and tried not to visibly inhale the musky scent of sweat and desperation that was him.

They stared at one another, each taking the other in, both feeling the charge of the heat now pouring through the vents. Cole cleared his throat and forced himself against his door, “So, you’re new, right?  At school I mean.”

“Yea, we just moved here a couple of weeks ago, from Florida.”

“Florida? You’re from the beach?”

Penny barely stopped herself from laughing. “No, we lived in the middle of Florida, nowhere near a beach.”

“Oh.”

Cole could see Penny a bit better now, thanks to the moonlight shining through the windshield. She had thick, jet black hair and skin so white he couldn’t help but wonder how she’d kept it that way, considering she’d lived in Florida. He was staring at her eyes, trying to decide if they were green or blue, when she cleared her throat and looked away. Cole felt too warm now and turned the heat down.

“So, um, Penny…” he couldn’t believe he was lost for words. He was never lost for words. He glanced around, as if in search of someone to pull him out of this awkwardness. His eyes landed on the radio and he secretly chastised himself for not thinking of it before, “Do you like music?”

Penny lit up brighter than the moon that had escaped the clouds completely. He saw that her eyes were blue, very blue. “Oh, yes, I love music. Well, as long as it isn’t The Doors. There’s just something creepy about that guy, what’s his name, the lead singer?”

Cole loved The Doors, “Jim Morrison?”

“Yea, that’s him. He’s just weird, you know?”

“Yea, he is kind of strange I guess. Well,” Cole reached to turn on the radio, “hopefully the radio’s playing something else right now.”

They were. The quivering tones of Crimson and Clover, by Tommy James and The Shondells, surrounded them and Penny jumped in her seat, “Oh, I love Tommy James!” Realizing her enthusiasm, she amended that, “and The Shondells. They’re really good.”

 “Yea, they’re all right I guess.” Cole tapped his fingers on his knees, noticed he was getting carried away and used his other hand to stop the tapping.

My, my such a sweet thing

Penny touched her warm hand to his.

I wanna do everything

What a beautiful feeling

Cole’s heart stopped beating.

Crimson and clover

They moved closer together.

Over and over

He squeezed her hand.

Over and over

He wrapped his arm around her shoulders.

Over and over

Crimson and clover

Their lips met.

Over and over

Jolts of static electricity flashed through the night

Over and over….

*****

Crimson and Clover, by Tommy James and The Shondells – although I’m adding the video so you can listen to the song, I couldn’t help but notice how oddly beautiful the video itself is. I hope you enjoy!

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